Category: communication

Choosing words for poetry

Poetry Tips
Choosing words for poetry

Poets need to understand words, letters and sounds in ways more intimate than the reader or the writer of prose.
I want to take you on a journey and show you had you should think of words when writing your poetry.

I was given the words PEACH, PAISLEY, PACHABEL, PERIDOT for a challenge.

To me these words fitted into a romance a seduction scene with two players and some music.

So my thinking was Pachabels Cannon in D I don’t know if you have heard it, its a beautiful piece of music and its made up of repeating refrains so I wanted to replicate that in the poetry music.
I needed repetition within the poem and repeats and I also wanted repetition of p and s sounds.

I used alliteration but I also wanted to use euphony letters beginning with p are associated with masculine , power and pride ..s words are associated with secrets, sensuousness so accentuating these sounds will help set the mood of the piece.
I choose words with p and s with the connotations that I wanted and I choose words with p and s in the centre to keep the sounds progressing.

My peacock is a metaphor
Then my word choice
preens gives me the p and s sound …it means devoting time to making oneself look attractive fitting my lover who is a peacock
prances again gives the p and s sounds …it is also making exaggerated movements ..that will get noticed
Then those words are repeated but reversed like the steps of a dance.
He poses and exudes power …and the narrator is interested excited

In the second stanza romance is building so those s sounds come to the fore.
Combined with t which adds a trembling sound.entwined, trailing, atmosphere.
Plus the slithering s tones of slow, sound, speeding, shudder, unison, softly

We continue in stanza 3 with the repetitions but we add he sound of l which can be a sound of lightness and clarity.

So the mood of the poem is built, the emotion heightened.
I formulated a list of potential words, I checked meaning and connotation and picked the words with care.
I tried to continue using my sounds and refrains to echo the refrains in the music.

This poem is also is an extended metaphor.

Now you might not like this poem it may not appeal to you.
But read it aloud feel how the words flow together hear the sounds and try to emulate good word choice in your poems.

Cannon in D

The peridot peacock preens and prances
prances and preens
the feeling of power positively exuding
from the pose
his display raises my pulse
pulse beating in my neck above
the
peach
Paisley
of my shawl.

The slow sound of bass notes entwined
with the trailing notes of violins
start to create the atmosphere
for sharing secrets
touching
inner
chords
slow sounds – speeding -twining
like rising pheromones
I shudder as my peach paisley slips
across
my skin

The peridot peacock
preens and prances
Pachabel adding life and lustre
subtle refrains building building
I smile and power transfers
as I stand and pose and preen
the suspense peaks
we move in unison softly touching
speeding – twining.

peridot
peacock
rocks
peach
Paisley

with Pachabel.

Samantha Beardon©

How do you choose words for your poetry!
Samantha Beardon

Ego

Some people chat on line to get to know people make new friends. Some do it boost, their egos to have a virtual affair, to exert their power, to chase capture and discard. Be wise, hold on to your heart, too good to be true? It probably is!

Would I look?

Would I look at you ,the same ,” regardless”
if your eyes were filled with pain
I would probably look closer, more information to obtain
I might want to support you in your struggle to survive
To try to hold a mirror to the you
behind the pain and strife
I would want to demonstrate the power of belief
Particularly those negatives that can become life’s thief
I would look for signs, that you could love yourself
A must to heal that pain, and to transend the past
Would I look at you ,the same ,” regardless”
if your eyes were filled with pain
I would look closer more information to obtain

Where do you stand?

Where do you stand, in  the summary of your life

Top, bottom, or middle, or just a worker in the hive

Are you on the treadmill, running out of control

Trying to please everybody, multiple roles

Do you see your flaws, rather than your strengths

Give to others, go to any lengths

Feel stressed and unhappy

Try to struggle on, be crappy

Maybe time to stop and take a breath

Review your priorities, centre yourself

If you love others,you have to love you

It enables,a more balanced point of view.


Just to say

William Carlos Williams an imagist poet wrote with great brevity and wrote a poem in note form called Just to Say .

I have attempted a poem in the same style
I asked you and you said

No you didn’t want one

Have been dropping hints 

About the benefits
I know we haven’t had 

a detailed discussion

I worry that hot water

bottles will burst
So I just want to say

I have ordered one

An electric blanket which

I hope will make us both
More comfortable 

Why rhyme

Words crawl across the page

Full of ideas, need to engage

Stories, prose or rhyme

Has to be rhyme, when , little time
Rhythms and rhymes feels so easy

Feel so right, work so cleanly

Poetry purists will say how cheesy

Expell their breath, very wheezy
An idea to express,  reaction to provoke 

A hope for debate, revolt, or quote

Human relationships float my boat

Love, lust and human trust, my promote
Why rhyme

Nice line

Tends to keep things 

On springs
I can do more rounded prose

Use large words,maybe pose

Metrical composition

Personification recognition
Versification 

Conflagragation 

As long as it rhymes 

Suits my paradigms
Why rhyme

Because I so love it!

Sadness sometimes lurks in a corner

But as an optimist,I try t be an informer

Control

Playing, positive, pleasure,

Words, wistful, wonder,

Games, graceful, gratification,

Modish, match, mastermind,

Male, mission,mesmerise,

Beware, bewitch, brazen,

Flirt, forsee, future,

Danger, dalliance,dependence,

Raise, rules, rocking,

Prey, prophetic, paralysis,

Hedonistic,hope, hunger,

Ego, extra, extended,

Reason, rationalise, stay in control.